tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19954746.post3730280097978672900..comments2023-10-28T06:24:47.456-04:00Comments on Song of a Reformed Headhunter: Poem: "The Mountain"Jee Leonghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01979179110231643931noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19954746.post-30689074851476891412010-02-12T15:40:42.305-05:002010-02-12T15:40:42.305-05:00I am not sure how I should handle "the act.&q...I am not sure how I should handle "the act." grammatically.<br /><br />Poetically, I see where "the act." the fructification of the word via the flower is going, but "the act." itself seems to dangle there mysteriously like some sort of dangley thing I can't quite identify, but which intrigues me greatly.<br /><br />As many dangley things do...Eric Norrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14134441351114653719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19954746.post-35532692434528472432010-02-12T05:49:59.260-05:002010-02-12T05:49:59.260-05:00Thanks, Eric, for looking at this. You must clarif...Thanks, Eric, for looking at this. You must clarify for me what needs clarification in that line. Yes, I am that stupid.Jee Leonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01979179110231643931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19954746.post-15298526633323550732010-02-09T12:31:38.526-05:002010-02-09T12:31:38.526-05:00I like the trajectory of this one from beginning t...I like the trajectory of this one from beginning to end. It has a lovely symmetry.<br /><br />There is one line I think needs clarification:<br /><br />"the word a flower becoming a fruit the act."<br /><br />I think I know what you are getting at but the line doesn't quite make the imaginative leap itself...Eric Norrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14134441351114653719noreply@blogger.com